This is our final draft that we came up with after altering after receiving various bits of feedback. Compared to our first draft we changed quite a lot of scenes and shots in order to make the story more understandable. We also cut out several shots including the library shots, in fact we got rid of all library shots as we thought that they didn't fit in with the new edited version.
I think our final version was a lot better than our first draft, I think it looks a lot more professional than it did before because of the effects and editing we did after.